Comments on: Whisper of a River Nearby by Jeff Tannen http://www.backhandstories.com/fiction/whisper-of-a-river-nearby-by-jeff-tannen/ Backhand Stories is a creative writing blog that supports new writing and the writing community by publishing new short story fiction, creative writing, short non-fiction stories and essays by new and unpublished writers Tue, 07 Oct 2008 13:48:11 +0000 http://wordpress.org/ By: admin http://www.backhandstories.com/fiction/whisper-of-a-river-nearby-by-jeff-tannen/#comment-30 admin Fri, 11 Jan 2008 18:32:37 +0000 http://www.backhandstories.com/?p=39#comment-30 Jeff, this is a great piece! I think it would be vastly improved though if you gave your protagonist a name - you don't need to use the "she..." device here. Cheers, Martin Jeff, this is a great piece! I think it would be vastly improved though if you gave your protagonist a name - you don’t need to use the “she…” device here.

Cheers,

Martin

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